GLOBALFOUNDRIES Singapore
Tan Jonathan
Blk 123
Serangoon Rd 123
S661234
Serangoon Rd 123
S661234
Application Letter for Process Engineer Position
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am currently a fresh NUS graduate with a Bachelor Degree in Applied Chemistry with Honours. I am writing this letter in hope of having an opportunity to work in the prestigious GLOBALFOUNDRIES Singapore as a process engineer, having seen the company’s advertisement in the Straits Times Recruit.
The company’s desire for innovation and product excellence is an encouraging factor for me to apply for this position as I am a firm believer too. This belief that such abilities can be nurtured through having a variety of academic and working experience led me to do internships with TÜV SÜD PSB and a pharmaceutical company.
During my internships, aside from my usual duties to oversee certain processes, there were opportunities to work with resident engineers to discuss about innovation and pilot projects. We studied 10-year-old systems to look possibilities to save cost or replace parts to increase efficiency and software improvements to increase productivity.
Even as a choice of undergraduate course, I took the path less travelled as an applied chemist as it gave me the opportunity to go beyond pure theoretical chemistry into different areas such as materials and even engineering.
Learning and growing from all these experiences, gives me an edge over other applicants who never attempt to step out of their comfort zones. Thus I believe I can be a greater blessing to the GLOBALFOUNDRIES through innovating and breaking of new boundaries.
GLOBALFOUNDRIES is a company which has an extensive network and a global footing. It is a leading foundry technology leader with a long heritage of manufacturing excellence. Its commitment to the area of innovation can be seen through its willingness to spend USD$1 Billion for R&D. Hence with a similar goal in mind, it will be an easy task for me to integrate into the working culture and work to benefit the company.
A letter and resume can say only so much about my motivation and qualification. Hence, I will be eagerly waiting and available to answer any queries. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Thank You for your consideration.
Yours Faithfully,
Tan Jonathan
Hello Jonathan!
ReplyDeleteI thought your letter is pretty well written and I like the way that it is presented.
I just thought that perhaps more of components mentioned in your letter could have been put in your resume instead so that it will look more concise and the person reading it will be more willing to pick up your letter to read.
However I also think that perhaps there's so many things to write and reading it in detail, I probably cannot decide what to remove either.
Hi Jonathan,
ReplyDeleteYour letter is well written and good paragraphing. Just a minor comment though, for the format, it seems from the first peer teaching that after the Dear [name] is a colon, not a comma? Also, I agree with Dayang that perhaps your letter shortened to be more concise.
Hello Jonathan!
ReplyDeleteIt was a good letter but I feel the organisation of content could be better.
How I will approach is to allocate 1 paragraph for internships and then move on to another paragraph for achool. Currently, the information is spread out in two diffrent paragraphs and it may be confusing.
Also, You mentioned about the company, which I think was good, as it shows you know something about the company. However, I feel that it should be limited to 1 paragaph as well.
Yup. My 2 cents worth. =)
Berwyn
Hi Jonathan,
ReplyDeleteI feel that there are too many paragraphs in your letter, I think it is best to minimise to 3 or 4 where the reader will know roughly what each paragraph is about as it is standardized format.
This paragraph,
"Learning and growing from all these experiences, gives me an edge over other applicants who never attempt to step out of their comfort zones. Thus I believe I can be a greater blessing to the GLOBALFOUNDRIES through innovating and breaking of new boundaries."
does not say anything much about why you should be given the job, as the reader see no progress to you stepping out of your comfort zone, or did I misread? Did you mention an example of you stepping out of your comfort zone? Sorry if I made a mistake.
I also thought that the last 2nd paragraph should be shifted to the top, it will be better to let the reader know why you chose this company and then move on to why you qualify to work in it.
Lastly, you did not leave any contacts down, maybe you should add an email in?
Hey people!
ReplyDeleteThanks for all your input. I really appreciate it.
From all the comments, I gather that one important action I need to take is to make my letter more concise. I will try my best to leave out unnecessary details or shift a few points to my resume.
In reply to Lynette’s query. I did mention that “I took the path less travelled as an applied chemist”. However I will still attempt to improve on that portion to make things clearer. After all, our application letter is given about 20 seconds of attention and we need to be as clear as possible.
Once again, thank you for all your valuable inputs!